Gabby

=**//Hi guys,//**=

=**//Here is the writing that I have done about the cave can you please help me with my sentence starters.//**=

** The Cave **
 * As I was walking over my granddads long forgotten farm, I was thinking to myself “isn’t this beautiful”. Suddenly I heard a screech I said to myself “what is going on. What was that noise?” I was scared I had no idea what to do. “Ahh” I said as I heard it again. I tried to follow the sound it got very loud as I walked past a cave. It sounded like someone was in trouble. I followed the noise. I was terrified it sounded like I needed to go inside. I decided to say something so I shouted “are you alright, who is this, do you need help are you stuck.” **
 * The voice said “it’s Michel” **
 * I said granddad are you alright “it’s gabby” “do you need help” “YES” sobbed granddad I’m stuck “please help”. I climbed down the cave yelling “where are you” walking through the rough uneven mud. Granddad said “to the left of the headlight on the ground”. Suddenly there he was stuck in between the mud “I tried to lift him out” I couldn’t do it he was really stuck. I said “hold on” as I call for help” as I did I felt like a hero I was so proud. The next door nabor finally came. We pulled as hard as we could he finally came out of the sticky mud hole. We all climbed to the top of the cave and granddad told us how happy he was we all went home to have a drink. We were so relived. **

//**By Gabby**// **quickly, in front of i tried to follow** **instantly, in front of i climbed down.** **By Conner .S.** ** Great feedback, Connor. Thank you for asking for help with such a specific aspect, Gabby. **