Connor+S

Connor R espect peoples property while you are using it. E valuate your work without help. S upport others when you are told to. P ush yourself in stead of being silly. O bey what you are told and at the right time N ever be lazy and slack with your learning S ay the right words in the class. I n the playground help young people. B ond I think it is caring when you are responsible L iable to be blamed I like helping older people because it feels good and they thank you. T rustworthy Y oung people are not as responsible as older people because they haven't had as much experience as us.

__ 3rd September, 2012 __ My sentence is not that good so can I have some help.

I go under the rock like a mice squeezing under the door.

Thanks Connor. S

I squeeze under the hard lumpy rock like a mice squeezing under the crusty door.
I'ts a bit better because i described the rock and the door.

Well done, Gabby. A really good improvement. I really like the way you explained WHY your sentence was better. Miss Park.